Broken^Minded^Warrior

Pretty nice! Questions, questions.... Asside from some of the forced rhymes, all that needs fixing is... The capitalization and the punctuation. The only way that I could tell the difference ...

Wow... Just Wow... That was a good "Wow...", BTW. Only one suggestion, though. In this line, "To something called cancer" might look a little better as "To something called - ...

Yayness, Poetry! XD Anyway, the only thing that I could spot that nobody mentioned was that you need to work on you stanza spacing. For example, She chose to walk ...

Wow... "Is it a crime not having the passion to pursue something you're very good at?" No. I am good at lots of things, but some of I totally don't ...

Pretty sweet, the way that this is crafted. Aside from what Fye said, one thing caught my eye. In "Most days, though, he was consumed by the silence, and her ...

Wow... Pretty sweet, scary, and so like this world today... Just one thing, though, asides from what the other people said: in "He never called her on the phone, Just ...

Welcome! Yeah, pretty strange to hear that from a new b, but anyway... Well, Kyte and Sunny pretty much nailed it, except for in "Paul got an evil eyes from ...

Good job! Honestly (personal opinion), this sounds great sung. Perhaps you could consider posting this in the "Lyrics" section The only thing I could really find wrong was that you ...